Right at the beginning when the events in the trans class start to be narrated, the narration seems to get lost and/or things get confused. You don't know who's talking. Even though you write that you're napping in your room, at a certain point it's narrated as if you were in the trans class, and things get even mo...
Grade: B-. Huge potential but misses the execution. It’s worth your time for the initial part of the story, but there is a lot of lore built up with the trans class that I don’t think it executes well on. I got confused when Hana came into the story and I edited to clarify, but I was still confused. Creative bot, b...